Dougal - give me the numbers, and I will bet on them. I have made no pact with the Devil, so if he comes around looking for trouble he will get his ass kicked.
Split it 50-50 sound OK to you?
Dougal - give me the numbers, and I will bet on them. I have made no pact with the Devil, so if he comes around looking for trouble he will get his ass kicked.
Split it 50-50 sound OK to you?
Fine story Dougal. A real good read. Nice pacing.
A nice piece of fiction, Dougal (not sarcastic). Your writing is engaging, the dialogue natural, and the ending has a real bite. Thank you for a good read.
Some pretty heavy stuff.
Hey Dougal, you should try to find about short story competitions in England.
I have a friend who entered one in New Zealand and won!
His story has been published and it has done wonders for his self confidence. He is now writing a novel and I think publishers would be more inclined to look at it, now that he has had something published.
Go for it!
but don't enter that story.
i have already entered it in many competitions and you will be accused of plagiarism.
lesson #1 for would-be writers...copyright before publishingOriginally Posted by slimboyfat
That's my mind made up..I'll never , ever go into Carousel.
It's a really long story...
...is there a DVD?
Makes a mental not not to send you a copy of War and Peace or Lord of the Rings for Christmas.Originally Posted by risktohimself
^ That's fine, mate. I don't normally read works of fiction anyway.
Yours though, if true, was an interesting experience.
i'd forgotten abnout this thread, truly great stuff Dougal!
worth bumping for others to see it also!
^
not a bad bump for you.
I'd green you except William deserves it more for giving you the idea that you copied.
copying gets a red.
except i was surprised that although william quoted it - nobody bumped it!
i was helping out u twat welsh gnome !
^^^Thanks for the bump, cracking read.
Fascinating and intriguing story.
So Dougal-
Have you heard from Luke since?
Did you go travelling as planned?
Any more developments?
I've been here for 2 years and I just read it. Excellent.
I think the ending is supposed to be ambiguousOriginally Posted by friscofrankie
Don't think the ambiguity is spoiled by that. If you sell your soul and go on a mission from lucifer you might sever all ties with your old life regardless.Originally Posted by ChiangMai noon
Anyway, great story. Cheers Dougal.
I didn't read this first time round either. Good work Doog.
Nice tale. Almost believable with all the shiesters in Nana.
But the barmaid would have taken you for a ride if you had no idea how long you had been there or how much you had to drink.
Wonderful story.
Ummm...is Noi still around and available?
'cause I am wondering what she got from Luke; wasn't looks, youth, money, erudition. Carnal expertise? Immunity to STDs? Long happy life for daughter? Revenge on her husband?
Was planning to go to bed, spotted this bumped thread, read it, loved it. Agree Dougal should write more.
A masterpiece! No wonder you picked up on my wifes age!
I get paid to pick apart people's writing. This is a classy read, Dougal, and I'm glad the thread was resurrected. Thank you for sharing your story.
Copyright? It's automatic, but Dougal can even use this thread to prove his right of ownership if challenged.
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